Intro is much more exciting! The jumpy bass keeps me intrigued and the chords that come in around 0:15 seal the deal. The drum beat that plays throughout feels a lot more solid. It's a simple rhythm that's very fun to dance to, and it's given additional flavor by the claps and other percussion that complement it throughout the song. I also love what you've done with the melodies, adding echo, reverb, "swing" and all that really helps give more life to all aspects of the song.
The melody that comes in around 2:10 is still incredibly catchy and captivating, and I like that you've added additional percussion and melodies during this part to help support that sexy ass riff. Adding all the support during the introduction of the new and complimenting melodies that occur throughout the buildup of the song helps make the actual breakdown that occurs at about 3:35 sound much more significant. It truly feels like we're coming to a climax rather than just another break in the song.
I will say, however, the breakdown feels a bit long, and the totally isolated melodies that play from around 4:45-5:10, while musically very appropriate and lovely, do take away from the danceability of the song. It feels like those would just be a solid 30 seconds where nobody would be moving on the dance floor.
The elongated breakdown and the isolated melodies are totally fine and are in fact quite pleasant when regarding this composition as a standalone piece of music intended for just listening. However, I feel like in a club/party/show that portion of the song would take away from the overall climax that's being experienced. Maybe throw in some background synths that slowly, chromatically slide from low to high pitches and vice versa. Maybe a slow simple drumbeat or something else that helps support the melodies, so that the isolated melodies will add to the overall feel of the song rather than feeling totally separated from the rest of the piece.
But of course, it's your song and you can take it in any direction you want. This sounds much improved from the version you posted earlier. The earlier version sounded like a blueprint and this sounds more like the plan being put into action. Keep it up, I look forward to seeing where you end up taking the piece!
thanks man, emailed you
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.