pretty good

This is probably my favorite track that I've heard from you, man. Great job!

What especially stands out to me is the music box and the way that you layered it and added some delay/echo effects to it by the sounds of it. It takes a line that isn't very complex and adds another layer on to it that pulls me right in and keeps me listening very intently. It reminds me a little bit of this artist Cast in Bronze who plays this keyboard type instrument but instead of strings it's bells.

Awesome piece, keep it up! :)

Probably should’ve expected it from your tags and description, but the amazing apocalyptic vibe you created was by far the most impressive thing about your song. The intro felt a bit sudden and jarring, but it soon made sense as the other instruments came in and the amazing mood emerged. Deep, booming basses, super-distorted guitar, dissonant, alarming synths… I think the only thing that could’ve made it better was that the drums could’ve been tighter and louder. Other than that, the mood was pretty much perfect. :)

That giant explosion you had at 0:39 was also amazing. The instruments that were playing faded out extremely nicely during the explosion. Sometimes, when you transition with a huge sound like that, the instruments playing before it don’t transition out very well, but your sounds weren’t sudden at all. You know, I actually wish the sound of the bomb was louder. :D Based on your story, this should be an Earth-shattering explosion! Nearly everyone dies! Don’t be afraid to go all out with your effects.

After the bomb, the music box made me a bit confused. To be honest, I hadn’t read your description until a few bars after the music box came in (sorry!), and it sounded a bit out of place. Once I read your story, however, I could see how the music box was an interesting element of it. It’s always interesting to see how people choose instruments when trying to reflect a story with their songs, and I think your music box, while initially a bit strange, was an interesting addition.

The ambience in the second half was great as well. I think your first half was still better, but the contemplative strings and strange, unintelligible voices make for a very nice mood as well. I think the first half’s mood feels a bit better is because of the volume of the second half’s instruments. I felt that the music box was mixed in a bit too loudly. Inversely, I thought the drums were mixed in too quietly! To me, it’d probably sound a lot better if you tweaked the volumes just a little. Also, one more thing I wish you’d added was a fadeout ending. Normally, fadeouts are taboo in musical composition, but I really like the image of a lone soul, desperate and alone, slowly walking away and losing hope for the future. But maybe that’s just me.

Overall, the thing I’d have to congratulate you on most is your creation of a chaotic and apocalyptic then desolate and lonely atmosphere. There were a few kinks to be ironed out, but I really enjoyed it. Good luck in the Halloween contest!

Cool piece dude, and the story really sets the mood for it.
I know it's a tow part story, but I liked the second part the most, and I think it can stand alone.
Don't get me wrong the fist part it's great too, it's just a matter of taste.