I really enjoy the idea behind this! The main change I'd suggest is with the mixing. A few instruments get lost in the mix because they're too quiet when compared to the drums or the harmony, and the piano melody near the beginning is too loud when compared to the mixing in the rest of the piece. HOWEVER, I would suggest to you not to lower the volume of the piano melody, but to raise the volume of the other synths, particularly those that carry a melody.
The main instruments I lowered were the pads and the second melody introduced during the break. The reason behind is to create an ambience/melody. The idea behind that was to do so anyway. I'm sorry if this bothered you. I'll try to solve this in my next production.
Thank you for the critique!
I like the electric-orchestral mixing you've done. I thought it was a bit repetitive, but then I realized it's a loop, so nevermind that; nice work!
Thank you very much for your comment!
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.