For this piece, since it’s a little longer, I’d like to highlight bits here.
The intro (0:00 to 1:10) has some good technique behind it. I’m enjoying the way the piano is a little like a stream of consciousness. Very relaxed, although I’d like a little more variety in the way of basic chords and notes at random. It doesn’t seem to make much sense, and the transition made from the intro to the second part is a little clunky. I do love the little space-whistle that comes in! Threw me for a loop at first, but I think it’s a great addition and I think it’d be great to hear more tiny instrumental chirps like that peppered throughout the intro to liven it up.
1:10 reminds me a lot of Banjo-Kazooie. A little mystery, something ethereal, and nothing too conclusive. The bitcrushed synth sounds great and was a good choice to get the song chugging, and the transition works well when we cross over to 1:51 with the little shaker rhythm.
At 1:51, off the bat, the piano is too much. The lower portion needs to be toned down, maybe even muted a bit, and once again no discernible, memorable melody here. The reverb on the piano is slightly overkill, and the drums have barely any, so the piano is uncomfortably bright. Again, the notes aren’t too complex here, so this would work well in a montage, perhaps with a warmer piano.
I appreciate how you continued to use the synth that started at 1:10 throughout, but it was the only recognizable element I could continue to hold onto, and it felt by the end that you started just pulling random things off the shelves to finish the song/make it longer. I would probably argue, for the first time, that this song might be too long, actually – it felt like it was on repeat after 3:38.
You have some excellent instruments, and I won’t be one of those people that says “I’d love to hear you remake this/work on it” because you meant to make this as is, and for that I appreciate it. For what it’s worth, I enjoyed it, even after nitpicking; you provided many different atmospheres, as a conclusion to your past works, and it was evident you enjoyed working on it.
NGADM Round One Score: 7.3