This is an NGADM Round 1 Review.
First, here's your score breakdown:
Total: 73.5/100 or 7.35/10 or 3.5 stars.
- Your drums were nicely done! They really have a good feel to them, but could of course use some more diversity.
- You have a nice variety of sounds and textures in the piece as a whole. You picked some nice sounding patches for this.
- The mix is very nice and clear. Everything is blended nicely, nothing sticks out too much.
- Transitions (e.g. 0:21) need to be smoother! Consider ways to smooth out the transition- cymbal roll, drum roll, arpeggio, anticipation, white noise, whatever. Experiment and find what works best for you and the style you are working in. Some transitions (e.g. 1:25) work fine with a more abrupt cut, but still could benefit from some smoothing out.
- The dynamics and motion of the piece don't really go anywhere... because of this, it ends up feeling pretty dull after a while as Step mentioned. Just because it's ambient doesn't mean it has to be flat! Lots of ambient pieces have huge dynamics. Maybe consider a way you can create a sort of "musical landscape" through the dynamics of the song, starting quiet, growing, growing, huge fuckin' ass climax, go down, or so on (you can even have two climaxes or build up and then chicken out then build up again).
- The song mainly functions as a series of independent phrases. Think about ways that you can utilize counter-melodies or ideas "conversing" to create more melodic interest. Right now the song functions as a sort of "Idea 1... Idea 2... Idea 1... etc" flow.
This is an NGADM Round 1 Review.
As you're not new to the NGADM, I've heard a fair bit of your work, and I've concluded that if there's one thing you're great at, it's creating textures composed of layers of different instrument tracks. Every piece of yours has this wonderful blend of different sounds that complement each other like peas in a pod. This track in particular has a seamless blend of orchestral and electronic, with even a distorted electric guitar sound showing up a little over 2 minutes into the track! Add accompaniment from percussion and sci-fi drones to that concoction, and you've got a very enjoyable texture. Might I add that your percussion is brilliant? It's rhythmically superb and sounds great (especially those tom rolls!). I would watch out though since it did get somewhat repetitive.
My issue with this track was already mentioned in the review section. This is very low-key stuff that doesn't have much movement at all. It retains a consistent dynamic from the beginning and since nothing groundbreaking is going on in terms of melodies (I mean, your motifs are pretty good, just not particularly complex or varied), this can unfortunately lead to the track getting dull. I found myself bored listening to this after you finished setting the mood and introducing the new layers of instrumentation, since from that point it didn't really go anywhere or provide anything memorable. Also, what's up with that ending? It just... stops! I mean, for a track of this style, I wasn't expecting you to end it with a bang or anything, but your ending simply came off as abrupt and premature.
All things considered, this is a very professional-sounding track and has some really well-executed ideas. Good job.
Good to see you again! To be honest, I'm aware of all those issues you mentioned. I still need to get some experience in this kind of music, and I promise that I will work hard to get better! Thank you for your review, it was great to participate again!
See you next year :D
The droning, repeated pattern that appears throughout the piece is really good, and the subtle ways it shifts throughout always feel natural in context. I also really liked the slightly fuzzy lead sound that comes in at 2:07.
Interesting choice of title, too. It fits how low-key and slightly off-putting the piece is. In fact, I might have liked it more if there were slightly more dynamic contrast, but it's still quite enjoyable and has an excellent moody atmosphere.
Once again, you impress. Great track!
Great Work~! Keep it up. :3
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