This is an NGADM Round 1 Review.
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That has to be the cutest intro of the whole round, hands down! Plus, you've got a memorable and thematically-suitable melody to boot, which gets the ball rolling on the first topic of discussion - the composition. There are some things I absolutely love about your composition, such as the addictive little ditty you introduce at the beginning on the music box and use to tie the whole song together, or the absolutely wonderful harp sections at 0:43. With sections like those you're able to create these surprisingly atmospheric ambiences that are simply a pleasure to listen to. In fact, I would've not hesitated to add even more of the harp to the track since it feels like it would work so well in this track.
Now, unfortunately I can hear that this is out of your comfort zone. For instance, if you had some experience you'd know that some of the things you're doing here are simply no-no's, like repeating certain small patterns over and over again without changing them, something which is perfectly fitting in electronic music but not so much in this more expressive music which is technically supposed to be played by an array of musicians. For instance, the percussive beat that first kicks in at 1:27 got extremely repetitive and consequently sounded unnatural, and your main motif, while pleasant, is too short to have repeated many times over. It needs more flow; more progression! By the way, your transitions are very abrupt (which was already mentioned in the reviews), so that's another thing to work on. Lastly, there's a bit of dissonance at parts like 1:36/1:45 in the high string staccato notes which is a bit offputting. Was it intentional?
While this has a fair bit of room for improvement, I commend you for the experiment and I hope you keep on pursuing this genre because you have a knack for it!
SCORE: 7.8/10