That piano and brass man. Good stuff.
A good piece of work. I particularly like the chorus, it's very catchy and fits well. The only improvement I would make to the chorus is the words Line Up. Maybe pronounce it a little more aggressively, like you are barking a command.
Most of the verses are pretty good, it's just the odd line that is a bit choppy flow-wise and could probably benefit from some extra syllables here and there to fill the spaces, rather than prolonging a pronunciation to fill the syllable space.
In terms of the beat I made, it has a distant feeling. I wish that I had better mixing skills to give the sound more presence. It feels like it is too far away.
I think the overall vibe of the song comes across pretty well, you have done a good job on it.
Yo nietzlawe, Great review. Thanks for the support and the collab. It was a fun track to work on and I kinda see what you mean by the lyrics, but I did write it all in about n hour or so and only tweaked a few things. Guess I was just vibin to the sound. ^_^
yo your lyrics are deep but theres some lines i dont understand but that may just be my fault like to me your lyrics feel like a poem, or a bunch of random thoughts i dunno about the beat but the hooks are solid. like maybe work on your flow a bit. The way it was recorded was well done to me. Generally this tracks good theres some things you need to work on. Im a rapper/producer as well if you ever want to collab hmu.
Hey thanks man, I appreciate the rep and honesty. Hit me up with a PM with a project you wanna do.
Really good track. Beat sounds a little too midi, but the lyrics go hard. Nice man.
Thanks man! Worked pretty hard on it. Just glad to be back
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.