Hey there jawalker213!
First off I'd like to applaud your effort :)
Secondly, I would like to take the time to go over some fine points with you about your song here...
(Constructive criticism GO)
Throughout the song, you have one drumline, which is very indicative for a DnB song. I expected to hear a more "in-depth" use of snares, bass drums, possibly even a little timpani in there somewhere, whereas not only did the drums hardly ever change... (giving it an overwhelming feeling of repetitiveness...) there felt a little too sharp, like a really hard kick and then nothing. No drawback, no phase, no bassline. which brings me to another point. There's no bass in this piece.
My advice for your next song, If I may dare to give it, would be to work on an overall drum rogression that can be interchanged throughout the song, and to have a bassline to match not only the melody, (which btw albiet a great idea for a melody, also becomes repetitive around the 1:02 mark) but also the drumline, something that can also be interchanged throughout the song.
Overall for execution and deliverance of the song, I'm giving you a 3 1/2 review rating and a 4/5 vote, because I (as a musician myself here on Newgrounds) know exactly how many people zero bomb, and just how discouraging that can be. Remember though, I'll be looking for new works from you, and If you want a 5/5, you gotta show me what you're made of brother!
Thank you for taking the time to carefully review! I've enjoyed listening to your take on music as well! And also, thanks for being a considerate person in the online community.