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Here's my song for round 1 of NGADM 2014, enjoy! My writing, and mixing skills have definitely improved since last year's NGADM. My Round 1 submission for last year is NOTHING compared to this. I hope you guys think the same, enjoy!

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This is a NGADM review!
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Despite the score I gave this, I do like your song, don't take it the wrong way, it's just that I think it had more potential, as do you!
Mixing/performance: 6/10
I'll be brutally honest with you here, I don't think the mix is good, on several levels. This doesn't mean it's all bad - your sound is very reminiscent of Pretty Maids (Running Out), an awesome band (and song) if you ask me! They also had their drums in the foreground to drive the song, preferring to push the heavy guitars back a bit so that the vocals could be in the front. The difference here is that your song does NOT have vocals, so it's a bit of a shame that the guitars are buried in the mix this way. Also your drum sound is very lacking, it has no depth (like Step said, the whole thing sounds very "thin"). If I were toco rely on the drums to the same extent as you did in this I would work my ass off to make them sound insanely good. Beef them up with a bit of white-noise "a la 80's" and a tight but wide reverb and it would be awesome. Instead I'm greeted with the metal kit from Superior Drummer or something... You did get an extra point for some really good guitar playing though.

Composition: 7/10
You have quite a few good riffs in this, nice work! The rhythm and melody sections complimented each other well too, a sign of a good song writer. Sadly there are quite a few things that let this down, namely the last third of the song. The clean section drops in at the end with no warning... Silence... Build up to metal outro... manic drums. It really didn't make sense to me. I also found some things a little repetitive, such as the repeated guitar runs at 2:24 onwards.

Overall I did enjoy the track and I think you have a lot you can do with it, so don't feel put out by my less than stellar review, use this as a platform to grow and come back with a vengeance next time! I'll be rooting for you!

Metallica1136 responds:

Yo man, sorry for the extremely late reply, I visit Newgrounds mainly just to check for new reviews nowadays, not busy on here like I used to be. And I do understand what you're saying about the mix. Snare does sound too tinny and thin, drums are much louder than guitar. I have been learning more and more since I read you and Step's reviews, I've been keeping the drums down, and I've also been working on getting a much heavier wider mix. I already got a much better tone. I appreciate the absolute honesty in this review man, thanks!

This is an NGADM Round 1 Review.

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I think your track, despite being the same genre as PirateCrab's, is quite the polar opposite. He's got insanely good production but could have made his track more structured and containing more melodic ideas, whereas yours has weaker production but jam packed with sweet melodic ideas and a pretty great structure to boot! I'll start with what I enjoyed. Your track has some pretty awesome ideas such as the clean guitar at 3:50 or the climactic arpeggios at around 5:04. You have a pretty solid structure too. I hear iterations of the motif you introduce in the introduction (namely 1:56) which help bring everything together, structure-wise. I can definitely hear an improvement in your writing since the last NGADM, so congrats!

In terms of production, while I am also hearing an improvement, I can't say I wasn't disappointed! The track is extremely thin and needs some more mixing work. The cymbals have too much high end, the snare is so thin it almost sounds almost like a rim click and the kick... well the kick is pretty OK, no problem there! The lead guitar is pretty good, but the rhythm guitar needs to be way wider in the mix, especially in the low and low mids. It's heard most clearly at the beginning where you have it playing between drum hits. I think it's a bit of a turn off to hear a thin guitar sound like that in the intro since it doesn't do your track nearly as much justice. There are a few other quirks like some inaccurate playing during the guitar solos and the weird transition at 4:39, so work on those.

You have a considerably solid and fleshed out track here with some nice ideas, but keep improving on your execution!

SCORE: 8.1/10

Metallica1136 responds:

Yeah man, I hear what you're saying, ever since I read you and Renard's reviews, I've been listening to my music again to hear what I can improve, and I definitely know what you're talking about! I've always had a habit of boosting the treble on the drums, I realize now, it actually sounds irritating, so I've cut back on the treble, and add a tiny bit of mids now, it definitely gives the drums more depth. Thanks for the review man, I appreciate it!

cool! from a critical standpoint, i agree with demon-slayer. song is sweet though, your writing has improved a lot. good luck mang!

Metallica1136 responds:

Thanks man! I appreciate it!

Good luck man, really need to kill that guitar static though, you can't notice it much when the mix kicks in but when the guitars are by themselves its distracting. Good song and structure though, its mainly just production errors that bring the score down for me, I think the guitars need to drive the song more rather than the drums, just bring the guitars up and kill that static, lol.

Metallica1136 responds:

Thanks man! I'm glad you like the track, yeah, I'll probably turn the drums down soon. And yeah, I'm gonna find a good noise gate VST, and eliminate that annoying static once and for all, I know that you'll keep mentioning the static even 50 years from now, but I don't blame you, the static IS annoying :P Thanks man!

Pretty awesome man! would you mind if i put some vocals to this?

Metallica1136 responds:

Yeah man, go for it! I'm happy someone wants to put vocals on my track. Thanks!

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4.20 / 5.00

Uploaded
Aug 11, 2014
1:39 PM EDT
Genre
Heavy Metal
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6.4 MB
5 min 38 sec
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