This is an NGADM Round 1 Review:
This track is definitely a huge change of pace when compared to your audition. To be honest, I was surprised that you went in the direction of EDM (not that there’s anything wrong with that)! There are some interesting melodies at work here (1:12 – 1:42 and at 2:09, for example). In fact, I think the portion after 2:09 is the best part of the track; it becomes very upbeat and is quite catchy! The melody in this latter part of the song is a bit generic sounding, but it was stuck in my head for a while after I had finished listening.
I have to be direct with you here, I am not a fan of the synth that you chose to begin your track with. It is a little too loud and harsh, almost as if it is out of place. Then once again at 0:08, the other synth that you introduce suffers from the same fate. When we reach 0:15, we have two very different, and conflicting sounds. This particular pattern (at 0:15) continues until it becomes much too repetitive. The song does break this repetition once it hits the 2:09 mark, but the transition is out of touch with the rest of the track. I can definitely see where you were going with this portion of track, but the execution just wasn't there. The voice that pops up once in a while sounds quite muddy. Is it saying “Let me take over”? Finally, the outro was another repetition but I think that you did a good job fading out each instrument!
Keep in mind that these are only my opinions on your track, and everyone has a different taste. I think you were able to capture some great melodic content here, and with a little more work on production and some tweaks here and there in composition, this could be something great! Keep it up FoA, I am looking forward to what you cook up next! :D