0:00 I like this sound. It feels almost like a little cute robot is making it.
0:06 This is a cute melody too.
0:13 Some of the background melodies are a bit "off", but that contributes to the atonal nature of the song somewhat.
0:25 And moments like this it snaps back to normal.
0:36 This would be really nice for a slightly dramatic SNES game or something.
0:50 This is an emotional melody. I like it.
0:55 This little change in chord progression I didn't like so much. I would have stayed with that same chord for the entire quarter (?) note. Hope I make sense.
1:20 This is kind of nice. The ocarina (?) melody is a *bit* busy at times, where it could subtly signify a pause, but it's mostly in the right place.
1:42 Not a big fan of this final part. It's not a nice ending, it kind of leaves you hanging a little. Unless it's supposed to loop, but the song was submitted as a song not a loop, so I'm kind of perplexed at how abruptly it ends.
Overall, it's a quaint melody with a nice little lead, but it's a bit abrupt and obvious in places. There are atonal background chords and stuff that work well for the song, and resolve themselves into nice chords, but I'm not a big fan of either the way the chorus' chord progression ends (I think it's the chorus) and how the song in general ends (on a hanging note). But these are just small nitpicks in what is generally a sweet and beautiful song.
Thank you I appreciate your feedback. The piece will be mixed into a loop for the game it has been created for.
HAHA don't worry, I write my atonal works to be performed live . You can't have a re-occurring (mainly) diatonic chord progression in a atonal work (unless you complete your aggregates with counterparts, but that would sounds like a off mix for sure). All the chords are just basic major and minor chords with some extensions.
You make some great points! You should have heard the how busy the first draft of the melody was haha, but you are right it can be busy. Thanks for bringing it to my attention.
Thank you for taking the time to provide feedback.
Keep it up!
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.