Unlike a lot of people on here I do like that you didn't make everything so loud that it blows out my headphones and gives me a headache lol. But besides that the song isn't so hot.
Like, for starters, the sounds you chose are okay. I like the drums but the synths or patches or whatever you used aren't good enough to repeat all day. And all you really did was drop different parts in and out throughout the song.
If I were you I'd check out other electronic artists on NG. You may think they make cool stuff because of more expensive equipment or schooling or something but it really is just skill that lets you make good songs.
Keep making music man!
thanks for criticts