I thought the ticking percussion at the beginning sounded pretty cool and went well with the introduction, but maybe it could have improved if its pitch was varied a bit, brought down a notch or had some heavier bass drum sounds.
That aside, it was an easy to listen to piece. I love the swiping/sliding of the notes, if I may call them back. Towards the end it started to sound a little spacey, like drifting up into the stars on a summer night lol.
Interesting piece. First i want to say i like its mood and also the concept. There is a lot going on while the structure is still quite simple. The 8bit arpegiator and synths work very well (chipsounds?)
I stil found a few little things which could be helpful:
- during the whole piece i was missing low ends - maybe a very deep synth which underlines the whole thing and creates some counterpoint to the high synths. This is done within a few minutes but will - in my opinion - will lift the sound to another level. Always try to use the full spectrum low - mid - high frequencies to get a balanced sound.
- the drum loops also work well, but you only used high ones. Maybe i would insert additional very low percussion to make the piece more punchy.
- also i think you should not forget the dynamics. This always is something which can intensify the feel a lot. E.g. if you start low volume and evolve it until 0:45 where the volume reache its climax you could build up more tension.
Overall good work. I enjoyed to listen to it - especially because it was a well thought out piece. Also the chip synths added a very nice retro touch. When i was a kid i was playing a lot on my c=64 with its SID soundchip. Cool stuff :D
My tipps are just my subjective suggestions, but i really think this really could improve the piece even more. Keep up the good work!
Something about this makes me like this more than most of the less experienced songs I've heard, I think it's that it sounds pretty unique and decently well written.
But I have to say a lot of problems in the song stem from the mixing and mastering, the bass kick has a tail that's too long and the low frequencies are too high on it so it creates a lot of ducking everytime it hits.
Also the arpy synth thing that pops up in the middle of the song and continues to the end really should've panned to the left or right at some point because it takes up too much space in the middle when the chorus comes back in.
I also wasn't a fan of that clicking noise? Like I don't know what that is, is that a cymbal hi-hat thing? Either way I think you could've done without it or replaced it with like a bongo or congo drum or something.
Anyways I do like this song and I voted it a 4, it actually has a pretty cool sound but your production skills gotta go up to make people go like "woah holy crap balls I want to hear this all the time".
Keep making music good madam or sir!
Thanks for the helpful review, I do my best, I'll reupload the song with the panning. Thanks for mentioning it :) I'm having a hard time mastering by the way. Someone should really help me with that.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.