Black Feathers (demo)

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Thanks for front page. Check out another one of my songs from the upcoming album: http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/582088

First song with the vocals recorded with my new Blue Yeti Pro microphone :) tell me if the volume of the vocals need work or not. This is a song from my upcoming album due sometime in the next couple of months or so.


verse 1

I've seen you fall from such a height,
that time you had no hope for flight.
Caving in to the shadow's depth,
and you kept walking inside death.
The winds were not your friend,
you gave up and met an end,
but I saw no peace in you,
when we met, then I knew


You had a light inside,
trapped by the tide,
I saw your cage without a key,
your heart was filled so empty.
I showed you all you are, you're never alone,
Flying with your feathers just to find a way home,

Verse 2
Reaching for a way to mold,
a better life that isn't cold.
Can you feel my embrace,
can't you see my tattered face?
The ropes keep pulling down,
until we elevate the ground.
Seeking helping hands to guide you,
asking yourself, "what have I come to?"

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Great tune, mang! Your vocals have definitely improved. Still a bit pitchy in spots and a bit out of control here and there...but otherwise some solid shit. You've been working pretty hard on them Great song, mang.

RealFaction responds:

Thanks! Yes I've been working hard on this album. I'll re-record some vocals next week or the week after when my studio is set up, it's almost done :) and redo the guitars in the chorus. i'm happy this got frontpaged. Means a lot this review coming from you though, always loved your stuff. You and the old singer for Alice in Chains inspired my new singing style as well as the lead singer of Alter Bridge :) glad you like it!

Pretty heavy piece! I liked the panning stereo effect in the vocals on that first verse. And by the way, nice job on the vocals! Much better than what I could do. Bass is pretty deep and makes itself known, but isn't overpowering the track. All the instruments overall sound pretty legit.

Okay, so one of my biggest problems I feel that this track is suffering from is that pretty much everything aside from the first verse I mentioned is centered in the middle. It sounds like there's a little stereo going on on the higher ends, but it doesn't help the song break out all that much. How much panning have you done with the drums? A little bit actually goes a long way, and I think a lot of people like to gloss over it because they think centering them is good enough.

Also, is that guitar just one layer? It sounds super sick, but I feel like this track could have benefited from another to help widen it out a bit. Maybe panning those backing vocals would help some too, but I wouldn't put that echo effect on them, because I think it might be too much.

Other than that dude, this is pretty dang awesome! I like the lyrical work especially, and I think this could really turn out to be something pretty spectacular once it's tweaked.

RealFaction responds:

Man...mixing is my weakness, not gonna lie. I kinda wish I could work with someone all the time but I don't have the money to get my stuff mixed free a lot. I thought it sounded fine, but I guess you've pointed out a lot of things that I have no idea how to do. Gahh. This is hard lol. Thanks for the feedback, not sure how I can fix these problems with what I have to work with. Thank you though.

Holy F***! you sound a little bit Corey Taylor... lovely voice, Keep that up and you be big star someday! NO you are star already :)

RealFaction responds:

I love his voice! He's one of my inspirations for singing rock and metal :) i'm a little confused on the 3 1/2 stars, but thank you!

I like the song, but I the chorus doesn't do the rest of the song justice. It isn't bad by any means, but when the vocals come in there's a bit too much echo, but I guess that might just be my preference. It's really great to hear your voice on a quality mic, though perhaps increase the vocal volume a bit so that the instruments aren't overpowering your singing quite as often.

RealFaction responds:

thanks! It's just a demo because I feel maybe it wasn't the best but wasn't sure how, the feedback definitely helps because I want it to be as good as it can be for the album :) thanks!

Credits & Info


4.14 / 5.00

May 23, 2014
2:35 AM EDT
General Rock
File Info
8.2 MB
3 min 35 sec

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