So...what is an industrial song? I'll guess it has something to do with the percussion.
Your drums stand out and are really cool! Some distortion at times...or is that just the industry?
I like this though. It's almost cinematic how you build on the parts with more and more arpeggiating. You never really have a melody or anything like that, and you bass gets a little repetitive--I would have a transition where the bass gets a solo, and then continues doing what it's doing. Otherwise you get the idea it's stuck in that pattern you put it in.
I'm not sure I would add a melody to this, because it's very engaging the way it is, but you might just consider it and see if anything comes up