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Got bored, made a thingy

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I like the tranquil mood at the beginning. It sounds very muddy and distorted at :10, though. The guitars completely overshadow the drums. I don't know if you made this in a DAW or if you recorded it, but either way please work on compressing that guitar and Equalizing ALL of the instruments. Otherwise, the harmonic and melodic content wasn't bad. The progression wasn't bad either, although the transition at :34 didn't really work that well. It was way too sudden. I would try letting the reverb do the work instead of cutting it off (kind of like you did at 1:16). Overall, it's not bad, but I'm afraid the poor mixing seriously detracts from my enjoyment of the piece. It's also rather short. I think some more melodic development and overall variation would help do the good ideas I'm seeing here justice. Right now, it's short, simple, and a rather "safe" piece to tryout with if you know what I mean. Please try to improve it, because it has a lot of potential. Keep at it, DFerociousbeast! ;)

5/10

DFerociousbeast responds:

I agree with the muddiness of the guitar at :10. The whole mixing was off because I had a pair of 5$ headphones when I made it, I just recently got a pair of fairly good ones for ~$50 so my eqing is off for that reason. I also know the drums are a bit unexistant because my main focus was the melody transition. Thank you for the honest review, it really helps with development of my music in a very good way

Right off the bat, I feel the speakers/headphones are blasting. Peaking. I hear crackles where I ought not to. In fact, just like Sequenced said, your drums have been drowned out.

You have a mix of the carefree and idyllic, and the energetic within this piece. Good balance. It's short, but I will not dock points for this.

However, I find that there's no sense of buildup. You're soft, then suddenly loud, suddenly soft again, then suddenly loud. The loud sections have equal volume to each other, and there's no climax for me to anticipate.

You have a good sense of chord progression, but I felt the piece was a tad repetitive. Vary it, switch it up perhaps?

Consideing you made this when you were bored (and probably directionless), props to you. But the piece itself feels like it needs to progress slowly, gradually, till it bursts of awesomeness.

5/10.

DFerociousbeast responds:

I put some of your points in the in thedoor6's review. I dont know what you mean by crackling btw, i dont hear any crackling at all. Maybe it's just when I slide up the clean which is natural and I cant really control that variable. Thank you so very much for the honest review!

A lot of your work really reminds me of bands like Sunny Day Real Estate, Cap'n Jazz, and American Football. That's just me.

DFerociousbeast responds:

dude i fucking love midwest emo! I'm heavily inspired by sunny day and cap'n jazz and most recently American football and if it's showing off then I guess that's great :D Thanks for the message

Makes me want to hear more.

DFerociousbeast responds:

I like to release a song about once every 2 weeks or so :)

i frontpaged ur thing

also

your drums were drowned out when you had the main theme going on. idk if you noticed it or not

DFerociousbeast responds:

yeah, I currently have bad headphones, I didn't know this when I equalized the song but I kind of got it down now. And thank you so much for the frontpage :D I saw it and got exited lol

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Apr 28, 2014
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1 min 33 sec
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