Surely sucks to have 512Mb of RAM, but on the other hand people used to make entire soundtracks on tracker softwares with only a handful of Mb, so it's all pretty relative.
I like the retro, new wave-like feel of this track, if fairly repetitive, it does have a structure I think you could still work on. I don't think the instruments clash to each other, but the sound overall it's fairly stripped down to its basics with a very "dry" feel that says all and nothing at the same time.
In fact, I think you could have enhanced your sound by introducing more background ambiances and synths, while still keeping your intended "low quality" environment and giving your track a little more of depth and detail. I recall listening back to The Cure with their very "dry"-sounding drums with some good amount of layering when it comes to guitars, ambiances and haunting vocals.
Speaking of which, I also understand that you've planned some lyrics for this track, but I was thinking, what if you whispered them throughout the whole song, giving it a more sinister, distant and mysterious atmosphere, sometimes even distorting your vocals at some points in the song? Right now your lyrics are like a ghost element in your track, like a presence that you wish you'd hear in the actual song, not something confined to its description.
I don't consider this track as bad, but I simply think it could have been more intriguing for the aforementioned reasons. There's definitely potential, though its execution leaves me quite wishing for more.
I'm pretty limited when trying to use today's technology on my PC. Everything just eats up my RAM. I can't add anything else to the project file without it acting retarded.
It really sucks, because I'm trying to mix in the vocals by using a rendered WAV of the instrumental and it sounds HORRIBLE, because I can't mix the instruments WITH the vocal tracks. Pretty discouraging, especially since there's singing, screaming, growling, whispering AND spoken word along with a couple harmonies and crap. It's a lot of work.
Honestly, I feel there's a lot to be replaced, it sounds like low quality stuff, i like a couple of the synths and the drums, but not the random "orchestral hit" i guess you could call it, I know it was titled "hit" or something in the FL library. I like the opening bell (if you call it that) but it honestly needs more as a song and the instruments used aren't bringing it to it's full potential. I wasn't fond of the repetitiveness in the song either.
1:08 felt the melody and instruments all together were just too chaotic and clashy, though clashy it's really a word I don't think. Overall, not too bad, but needs a lot of work. I realize you're going through a lot in life right now, and I hope things go well for you. This is my honest critique of the song and hope you got something out of it for improvement on the instruments. Keep in mind though, some of these things are opinions based on how I feel, but a lot of it is from experience.
May your life be well, I know this may not help though I have to be honest, and sometimes that's no fun. There's some good in this song, just could be built on. I know it sucks to run on 512 ram, though if it's ever possible, I'd get a new computer, trust me on that, it's very worth it if you can afford it, which can be a bit hard. Music is a hard investment though, take it from me, I know it all too well. You may get different reviews from the other judges, so look forward to that, you may get something better from them.
You are describing the kind of sound I wanted when you say 'low quality'. So plus points for me.
The hit is called HIT_5. Normally I'd make a sound myself using objects around the house, but that was the kind of sound I wanted already set for me. Originally, it was just a tom drum hit.
1:08 as in the chorus, lol. That's my favourite part. I've gotta say, of course it's going to sound repetitive, the lyrics aren't on the track! My song Beyond The Ether sounds like this too, cuz the vocals are missing.
I've said it a thousand times over: I don't make music so other people can like it, I make music for my own enjoyment and in some cases for the Lord. This song happens to fall in both categories.
So to everyone else who reviews my music: Don't be so reserved. If you hate it, I want you to scream it. Just stay within the confines of the NG rules ;)
And give me better advice.