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http://www.newgrounds.com/art/view/voec/hollow

The song was inspired by the above piece.

I was quite moved by the art. Very expressive, very harmonious aesthetically. A very delicate and emotional landscape, invoking a strong sense of serenity.

I can only hope the song lives up to its inspiration.

Thank you to VOEC for eagerly allowing me to use her piece for this contest.

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It was good, but I felt like it needed more to evoke the sadness that I (I don't know if anyone else) perceive in the figure from the inspiration.

Otherwise a very good and serene track. Nice work!

LunyAlex responds:

> 3 years late response:

Thank you for the feedback! Noted the critique and appreciate the words!

It's an enjoyable slow piece with a good structure and an atmosphere that doesn't fail to live up to the artwork of choice.

Dynamics-wise, I like how the strings are mastered and they manage to be quite expressive, although the instruments introduced later on while essential for the build-up they sound a little cluttered and bright compared to the somber, somewhat tragic mood of the intro. I would have loved a little more work on the bass frequencies, perhaps adding basses would suffice as to "carry" the chords along and letting the whole string work feel more cohesive.

I'd argue that the intro is perhaps the highlight of this piece, as it sets the mood quite well and it sounds somewhat natural compared to the mechanical-sounding piano which could have been humanized a bit in terms of velocity and time, and I'm not judging the quality of the samples themselves, I'm judging their execution.

The ending feels a little abrupt and I would have personally preferred if you left the second-last chord suspended for a while, made a brief pause and then a closure with a minor chord focused on the "heavier", bass strings.

//FD

LunyAlex responds:

Thank you for the feedback. Dully noted.

Spectacular!

Especially at 01:09 and onward. That particular section sets the piece up correctly and then at 01:30 is purely spot on. The only reason why I didn't at a half of a star is that it's not quite perfect in the first half of the song.

I wish I could have written like that for this: http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/567502

Pure respect
-Spadezer-

LunyAlex responds:

Thank you! Glad you like it!

Absolutely wonderful piece! I felt like the echo on the piano/instrument at 0:47 is a bit overwhelming at first but that feeling does go away as the song progresses. I'd like to hear it without the echo or perhaps with the echo saved only for the tail end of each set of notes for comparison. I do believe that the ending returning to the opening chords would be nice as well. These are really just suggestions and ideas more than criticisms though. Overall, it's a beautiful song and it reflects the art perfectly! Well done!

LunyAlex responds:

Thank you! I'm very glad you like it!

I'll look into the delay and ending and see if I can improve it. Much obliged!

Wow, this is very interesting. I like your use of delay and reverb, as well as the strings and everything really. Some of it sounds a little off and empty, but other than that, this is a nice piece of work. Just needs some work. Nice job.

LunyAlex responds:

Hey, thanks a lot! I'll try to bring some improvements to it.

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LunyAlex
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Score
3.98 / 5.00

Uploaded
Apr 6, 2014
7:15 PM EDT
Genre
Cinematic
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5.7 MB
2 min 29 sec

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