Without going around what has already been said: I think it's a somewhat enjoyable track with a grotesque atmosphere reminding me of a demented circus or an abusement park. The song doesn't really pick up until around 1:55 when more synths are introduced. The piece as a whole may work as a background music for some video game perhaps, but I wish it would offer more than a single melody stretched for almost four minutes.
It's not a bad piece, but there are details I think you could take into consideration for the future. The structure per se isn't exactly the solidest I've listened to so far but it's working, and if you played around your main melody and built variations on it, it would have made your track more interesting and less "burdening" in terms of catching the listener's attention. A bass line would have helped keeping things a little more engaging, even if it were just a pulsating four-on-the-floor bass countering the kick drum.
Consider this as a start for more similar ideas that could flourish in your mind.
"Fun" is probably the world that explains this track the best. I had great fun and in my head I actually imagined twocreepy ghost kids playing in a fun park which was very close to the picture it was inspired by.
As RealFaction said I also think it needs a bass synth. Either that or just a really bassy subkick :).
I absolutely love it and even though it's repetetive it's not a bad thing in this case.
4.5 and favourite.
This is a fun piece, fits the art piece well...but it's lacking a bass synth which would make this feel more complete, it's too repetitive and 1:52 just really throws it off with that synth that comes in...not feeling it. The song is missing some layers, but it has potential to be something really great and needs some tweaking. I love it so far just, it could be built on. Nice work.
i do believe the bass synth is needed, also i feel 1:52 gives it a darker feeling but it can definetley be improved and built on, thanks :) ill work on the repetition :)
at 50 seconds in I love that synth you brought in.
thank you :) i thought it fit perfectly with the art :)
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