im not really good doing reviews but will try my best!
very clever idea to make a cut-version or NG-version,
this way people actually visit SoundCloud haha!
anyways, ive taken my listen to the soundcloud song and have to say im fund of the intro, i really like the subtle sounds throughout and the short/strong builds.
the breakdown was clean, but also below the level of the whole track. then again you did a great job with that build towards the klimax. the subtle guitar does the job! really nice addition!
the hats might indeed need a little boost. the clap a small 2-3% boost.
the only thing i didnt like was the choice of the kickdrum you picked.
imo it felt like it didnt fit the track at all because of its 'uplifting' setting(minor bass levels).
i prefer a more bass-y progressivehouse kickdrum thats all!