The first thing I see is a great deal of inconsistency. You start off with this great mellow orchestral intro and promptly add fast and completely contrasting percussion (that high click thing... just no). Ambient and pop drums just don't mix dude. If you left out the drum kit and maybe had a little bit of orchestral percussion (gong/cymbals/timpani/orch chimes ESPECIALLY etc.) this would have been a great piece. Drums were definitely too hot anyway- they were cutting out the pads there was so much compression. IF you were to keep the drums, you'd have to transition them better too, they just kinda come in and out randomly. Fills in, fills out or whatnot.
Some nice low piano notes might also be nice.
I definitely do get a vibe of the city though from the dark stuff. Feels like something bad is gunna happen soon! Is Joker going to go rob a bank tonight? D:
A not bad piece, just you really shot yourself in the foot with the drums. It was this close to suspenseful, moody, dark, etc. Think about emotion this way: Long notes = suspenseful/gentle. Short notes = energetic/frantic. By combining the two, you nullified both emotions and created an emotional rift in which the listener really has no idea what to think about the piece. I am sitting here after the fourth listen still trying to figure out what I think about it and I still don't know. It just feels strange. Dunno man.
I too know you can do better. :/
Keep compos(ed/ing)!
-Samulis
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My ratings:
Originality- 6/10
Relevance- 20/30
Composition- 14/25
Instrumentation- 7/15
Mastering- 5/10
Emotion/Interest- 2/10
Total: -54/100 (NG: 2.5 stars)