Hiya. I think the underlying structure of the piece is good but I think it could do with some unifying element in the there that hooks it altogether. It's a bit disparate. There's nothing that really tugs on any of my emotions. Hook me in! Make me uncomfortable or scared or sad or whatnot. For example, I think the transition about 20 seconds in from your lovely opening violin line to the dissonant french horns is a bit forced, and the those two phrases seem to have nothing to do with one another. I also think you overused block chords quite a bit and it stopped your track from really coming alive. Sprinkle in some more interesting musical lines.

I hope this criticism is taken in the spirit in which it's intended. Good luck with your future work!