You've got the guitar tone down, in my opinion (for a WIP) but something is bugging me about the overall structure. It sounds a bit too rigid, try to make it flow better. You seem to have the breakdown thing going for you, and it's not bad by any means. The background lead reminds me of Meshuggah, which sounds like an influence of yours maybe?
Keep working at it.
Thank you. I know, i need to work a little to put it more together. I'll send you a PM when it's finished ;) And yes i love meshuggah. But its been a while since i've listened to them. Always appreciate reviews.