I like the beat and progression, and the mixing is pretty clear. It's very pizzicato-esque, though - some pads or something might smooth it out a little. I think your harmonies clash a bit at some places, like at :48. I like a lot of the isolated riffs, like the one that comes in at 2:23. I like the part around 3:15, how you ended it so atmospherically. The main thing that bothers me about it is that the pizzicato-heavy texture makes it feel incomplete and even harsh at times. In addition to adding pads, you could try adding more reverb or just using different instruments. Sorry if this review seems a little negative. I just want to help you improve! :) Keep at it, Mrobeymenow. ;D
Thanks for taking the time to review my work. If it weren't for reviews like this my songs would sound terrible. I will try to take what you've told me and make even better works.