Alright, it seems here that you just slapped together a few loops, and had them change notes every loop.

The loops themselves weren't necessarily bad. In fact, they were well constructed.

But other than that, it was all repetition. Not much musical value, there. Even toward the end, when you combined them all, it sounded like a big jumbled mess.

Listen, keep trying, and don't give up. Fruity Loops is hard, I know. It's a painstaking process, but as long as you hang in there, you'll do just fine.