I don't know why it took me so long to actually review this since this is my favourite piece of audio on this site.
I enjoy the rhythm quite a lot and the vocals are very good, the story is sad and makes us remember that not every kid has a happy life but the guitar tunes helps fade away the sad vibes.
I'm not much of a music critic but this is a great song and i think you would benefit in redoing it with a better quality michrophone or in a professional studio.
Thanks for the review. Wow, your favorite song on the whole website? That's saying a lot. So many songs up on here. Thank you.
Nice original song with a catchy melody and good lyrics! I definitly enjoyed this little song :3 I kind of wish you would play the guitar a bit softer tho and the vocals could shine through allot better if you record both separately. Also, You know there are some great drum vsts out there that sound almost as good as the real thing if you want to add a drum line without having a real drumer
All in all you've got great composition skills and a talent for the guitar but you need a bit more finesse when it comes to your guitar and a drum line would do this song some real good, i can promise you that. Hopefully with a little mastering and preperation, if you record this track properly you could make it a hit!
Keep up the good work dude!
Thank you alias, I'm grateful that you listened.
Quite an interesting piece you have there, with a very mature theme as well. Although the song as whole is a bit on the simple side, the chords you used work well enough and complement the lyrics quite nicely.
The solo @ ~01:00 was a nice change of pace, though the part @ 01:10-01:15 sounds a bit off: it sounds a bit too cheerful to my taste.
I think it might really be worth recording this with a more elaborate setup. The song has lots of potential, but the mediocre production quality is a limiting factor. At the moment it sounds more like I'm listening to a proof of concept, rather than an actual song.
What I'd personally suggest is to have at least three seperate channels: two recordings of the guitar hard-panned left and right to create a stereo effect, and have a seperate recording of the vocals panned to the centre. You could always opt to add things like percussion to add to the sense of rhythm. Even these simple changes could improve the production quality drastically.
All in all, I quite liked the song though, so 4/5 for you!
Thank you Eagle! Much appreciated, and good food for thought. I'm heading in to the studio soon, so I'll definitely take what you said into consideration. The lead does sound too cheerful. Agreed. lol Some girl getting raped shouldn't be paired with a happy solo. Although, that could be interpreted as the people around her having fun, and going about their happy lives while she is suffering. Or it could be happiness she strives for, only to be dragged back down again into the chorus. I don't know. That's just some bullshit I made up. The solo is way to happy. :)
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