I like the sound and would have liked to have the words to follow.
But, not a big thing! The mixing could have been better! But, then again I'm new to this as well and have had my issues with mixing as well!
It's just fun to write and put stuff together and hear it as you wanted it to sound!
So, don't worry what others want it to sound like, make it what you want it to sound like!
I learned the hard way and it is not a good way to learn!
But hopefully many people can learn from my errors and indiscretions!
Good piece... JQ
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.