its pretty good, but it feels a little empty. i feel like it wouldve benefitted from having the beat start earlier and having amore rich climax with maybe some longer notes in the background, to shape a more solid ground for the line you had going, if that makes sense. and then a bass of some kind. and upright bass or something similar.
while at the same time i dont really know much about this style of music so i might just be misunderstanding the point-
none the less it still feels a little empty.