I can't hear hardly any progression in general, the drum samples sound thin, the softsynth sounds are quite bland and it gets out of time later on. I just don't know what you were trying to do with this track. Sorry.
Personally, listening to your other tracks I think you should possibly build up from your better works like Dark or Journey. Keep building up your knowledge and your composing methods and keep submitting pieces to the audio portal. It would be very interesting to see how you progress in 6 months time if you keep going.