The intro is too long winded and repetitive. I would consider taking out the first 50 seconds entirely. The track overall is pretty repetitive too. I feel like this experimental tune could be the start of another track, but needs a lot of work as is.
The melody towards the end is pretty cool though and goes with the other layers of the track really well. I think having more melody in the song overall like that might be really cool, along with heavier drums.
Thanks for the feedback. I think this was meant to be a more atmospheric track, but i get what you mean by saying it needed to get to the point quicker. A lot of my songs tend to be overdrawn especially the intros. I might take another crack at what you suggest though and add more of the melody and concentrate on refining the hooks. Thanks again!