Great! you got some talent.

it loops perfectly. You cant really tell. Yes, there should be a female voice singing those lyrics like that guy right below me.

Tips:
1. Put some high pitch synth melody. That would be cool.

2. Maybe have a crash in there? or a reversed crash?

3. Make the melody sounds more interesting. That would really keep up the song.

I would really want to hear the complete version of this if there is one. Check out my stuff if you have time.

Q-Bix

needs a melody...

I'd say this would be a track for a female rapper to dip with. And I'd say she would have to rap this line:
No you can't touch - THIS (But I want to)
No you can't see - ME (But I need to)
No you can't Feel - THAT (But I like you)
I see it in your eyes, but I'm out of your league. (But she's got you on your knees!)