Great! you got some talent.
it loops perfectly. You cant really tell. Yes, there should be a female voice singing those lyrics like that guy right below me.
1. Put some high pitch synth melody. That would be cool.
2. Maybe have a crash in there? or a reversed crash?
3. Make the melody sounds more interesting. That would really keep up the song.
I would really want to hear the complete version of this if there is one. Check out my stuff if you have time.