VAC 11 Judge Review:
Well, you’ve definitely got three distinct characters. The mixing with the voices needed a lot of work; very boomy and bass heavy making it unclear. As much as hacking and coughing is fun for a crazy character, the fact that it took up a majority of the script was unnecessary. As for the plot, there was barely any to move along with. The beginning was nice to set up the general pretense, but then the actual execution of the action was confusing and actually I think it was just skipped over? I think they went in and then you cut to when they got back out. You just skipped the potential you set up for the whole first half. But, I did like the sound your characters, minus the excessive cackling. They just needed more of a somewhere to exist.