VAC 11 Judge Review:
I liked your banter in the beginning and how natural it sounded. The mixing was obviously off as it sounded out of place with the ambient street noise. When your Indian accent came in at the end, strangely enough it was somewhat hard to distinguish from your normal voice. A little pitch variation with one or the other could have helped differentiate. Also, with that end part I felt there was much more potential for it to be hilarious. Instead, it was kind of dull to me, but I could tell what you were trying to do. So that plot point needed work, but the rest of it before he chokes worked well. I really love conciseness, so I commend you for that. Overall, you did a nice job. Maybe a little extra character development and plot development. But good work!
Thanks for your review & suggestions/advice, Zip!
I guess next time, a script would help
Wow, this is disgusting, haha. I was mostly grossed out until the Indian guy came in and said, "He's dead because we've been talking!" Kay I admit that made me laugh.
The street ambience is a nice touch, and I especially like the sirens. Like the previous comment said, it gives it a GTA feel. As for the mixing, the Indian guy's voice abruptly cuts out at the end. The overall piece is nice and short, so if you could recover that lost second, it would make your entry sound a bit more polished.
Your acting is okay. I would have liked to hear more urgency in the main guy's voice when the other guy starts choking. The vocal range needs a little bit of work, too. The only thing differentiating these three characters are their accents, which is great, but you'll also want to think more about intonation and pitch.
Good luck in the contest :)
Thanks heapies for the helpful crit! :)
We know we probably won't win VAC 11, but we did want to provide some lulz. Glad we've done that, at the least.
Thanks again, for your guidance. I'll be sure to apply more tonality & sex to our next batch of voicey thingies.
def sounds like something out of a GTA talk radio broadcast.