VAC 11 Judge Review:
Were they robbing...a house or a store? Weird if a store had a doorbell or weird if the first character was using the word customer for visitors to his house. Anyways, your range needed to be much more diverse. I could tell the difference between the characters, but they were still very similar to each other. Mixing was pretty good as everything was mostly clear. In general, I think some ambient sound effects would have really helped. I think I heard at some spots you were recording in one take while switching between voices, which is sort of a no-no hahahahaha. The plot was random at times, I think it could have been more concrete. Overall, this was okay. What would really help is practicing coming up with as distinct characters as you can. The more committed they are, the more invested your acting will sound. Good work!
It was a house. I think I went a little overboard wanting it to be random and ridiculous.
Thank you for listening and for the advice. I'll be more mindful of these things in the future.
Your characters' voices sound similar, and they don't show enough emotional depth so they sound rather monotonous. The kid and grandpa's voices at the end are a nice change, though.
As for mixing, you could do with some noise removal. There is static on your recording. The overall piece is a little boring to listen to, so you could add some ambient sounds like crickets--it is night, right?--or even some music to spice it up. Most of the sound effects fit and aren't jarring in quality, except the siren noise, which quickly cuts out.
However, you don't make this longer than it needs to be and it doesn't drag on, so good job :)
Good luck in the contest :)
Thank you. I was afraid the character voices sounded a bit too similar. They're a lot more challenging than I expected. Still have a lot to learn, but I'm pleased with the overall result. Thanks for the pointers and for taking the time to listen.