Intro noise was neat. Drums after that sounded offbeat, like they were inconsistent and didn't really match up, and had too much repetition with no variation. The rest of the track had a neat melody going on, but it was all I could really distinguish. The drums were mixed way too low, and there wasn't anything else to really tie it together, so it sounded wandering, patternless. You've got good ideas with a melody, but you need to add more to give it context.