This game sounds like fun. haha. Well I enjoyed this. You offered a lot of range and music and the sound effects were well chosen and well placed. I do admit there was a part in the beginning where the gap of differentiation between the characters had narrowed and I became slightly disoriented, but as I said you offered a lot of range otherwise.
As I could hear the sound of the environment of where you were recording such as a wall or other flat surfaces causing a slight reverberation it was hard for me to envision a graveyard. I felt perhaps more critter noises like owls, crickets, wind or the rustling of leaves may have helped paint a more thorough picture.
Other than that your script was very creative and FUNNY! I liked the part where you said, "wait, can I rephrase that!?" before turning to stone. Heheh. Anyway. Four stars! Lovely job.
Thanks a lot for the critique. I'm glad you enjoyed it for what it was.
Yeah, I can definitely concur with you in terms of the atmosphere. My recording equipment, as it stands, is only slightly professional. I wish I had some blankets or pillows to try and compensate for that reverb in the background. Then again, looking at my laptop screen as well as being covered with a blanket is a little chaotic. For some reason, I don't like the idea of printing my scripts. I don't know why, but I should probably change my habit of that for future references. Blast my tiny, crammed room. -_-
That, and I can concur with your suggestions for adding more background noises like owls. I added a few after I uploaded this, but sadly I didn't even think about adding more.
Thanks again for the critique. I wish I could fix up my recording issues, but hopefully I'll think of something to improve my mixing.
Nice job, fellow entrant! I enjoyed this. The voices were great, and the plot was interesting. And wow, it clocks in at exactly 6 minutes. xD Glad you made it in there. Good luck!
Hehee that was enjoyable :D Whatever editing you did, I'm glad you got it down to EXACTLY 6:00!!! :O!!
Anyway, besides the physics defying issue I brought up earlier, I think you've adapted the script well to this condensed version, and the story was fun to follow. However, there was a moment around 2:00 where the voices sounded a little too alike. Otherwise, I think you displayed a good range from the high lady to the gravelly cockroach and then dopey Bob's voice.
A few mixing issues, there's some static toward the end before Mal discovers what Timmy's wish is, so you might want to tweak the noise removal there. I would have liked to hear a little more ambient sound effects, like maybe owls to set the scene? I really like that crow, though. Also I thought the transformation sound effects were too whooshy whereas I'd have preferred them...poppy. Music choice was great, too. Added to the scene, wasn't distracting, good volume level.
I think you stand a good chance in this competition! :D Good luck!
The upload has now been edited and fixed. Owls are now a good part of the ambiance, I re-recorded Timmy's response around 2:00 to make it his own, and I tried my best with that one spot you mentioned regarding the noise. It was tricky, but it does a little bit better than last time? 0_0
As for the whooshes, what can I say? I prefer whooshes than poppies. :3
Thanks again for the feedback. Hopefully it's a bit better.
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