What the hell?
Seriously, you should defenitely get some better software than Finale, I mean, I use it as well, but for composing only... You should defenitely get Garritan Personal Orchestra, or Edirol or something. Because this music is great, is JUST GREAT. But its quality is messed up.
I mean, That's the reason people like Winterwind-NS or MaestroSorrow gets the best score, is not only because of their talents at writing music but also because of their equipment. If they arranged it in Finale instead of their software their music wouldnt be that great.
Now I understand that it costs, and is probably the reason of why you dont get it.
But you should seriously get it.
At 00:15 is quite your style. Something very original :p.
I just wished you didn't added that Electric guitar(or whatever it is) at 00:40. I dont know.. its kind of loud. Gives a nice melody tough.
Something I loved was the bass violins 01:02, excellent work.
I've read the verses you quoted.
Yeh, it kind of gives the feeling you wanted to print into it, the intro most of it. Good job.
Favorite part? Defenitely 01:46 to 02:15.
I wonder... why dont you ever post on Classical?
(except for your "As I Enter The Gates of Heaven" piece, wich is another wonderful composition if you ask)
5/5 from me