Great sounds that all sound complimentary together!! Mood variation was already mentioned, I think that's the main thing missing here. The melody could also perhaps be a little bolder, all the notes in the melodies are very close together. love the porta/vibrato thing going on, this is good stuff!

Is it okay if I can just go out and say that I got up and danced to this?
And since you're wondering, it wasn't too loud at all.

The track was not repetitive at all, but it could use some mood variations, for ex. going from tense to relaxed, from dark to bright mood, tempo changes, etc. That would of course make the track longer (in duration and in production time).
This track was not loud, nor was it quiet.
I think you need a follower who would constantly find and tell you bad things about your submissions, that would satisfy your need for self-improvement.