The fabs or not, this sounds a bit as the Cure lol
I'll just be concise, the mastering is lacking. It must be more dynamic, just a bit, I know that a song titled Graveyard can't really be in it's purpose if it's too dynamic, but a bit of it is necessary otherwise the whole thing become a tad boring, and you don't want that...
The bass lick, and the progression that it sustains is nice, the notes the chorus hit are also appropriate, but the sound becomes very repetitive. I suggest you add secondary chords on top of those, something simple that works, or just maybe repeat those in a canon ( if you are not familiar with classic composition, wiki for canon ( music) ).
You need more atmosphere for your piano to deliver, I am sure you feel every single note the piano hits, but it doesn't deliver the same to everyone. You need to modulate the piano's volume a bit, also, you cannot rely entirely on the rain and background sounds to make your atmosphere.
I would suggest you add some reverb, if you play around with some serious reverb I am sure you will find something that suits this piece.
Overall, I like the idea, and I'll rate the effort; this piece comes from a person who I reckon is still learning and doing a good job at it, experimenting like this is the good thing to do.
Thank you very much!
Good idea. The rain and thunder sounds are quite good. I had to make sound fx for games myself, so I know how hard it is to record it. Good job. I like the other effects as well. Very haunting. I understand the idea behind the bass and the choir. Gives a nice spooky effect. However, they are rather repetitive. They also sound too clean and standard. I would dirty them up, make them sound fuller, more varied and interesting. The piano is actually a nice and necessary touch over it, but even that gets repetitive over time. It could do with more reverb. The song itself can do with more variation, more instruments, and a fuller more interesting sound. But you're on the right track. Just keep at it.
Thank you, much appreciated.
Thanks! I just started working with FL Studio 11 and your cartoon was the first inspiration. I might put more stuff up soon.