Loving the church bell at the opening of the song. I think perhaps some choir in the background at that point would bring out the other instruments you have that play along. The song itself seems to work for a horrific moment in someones life. Though the song is wanting a bit.. needs a little more to add that effect. Perhaps a heartbeat drum in the background. Those are my two cents. Good work thus far though.
I see what you're saying, and I think you're right. Thank you for the comments! I really appreciate them.