I like the lyrics but the presentation of voice provides disingenuous delivery for me. The effect on the voice is detracting (for me) and would be much more interesting (I think) if you recorded your own background vocals and layered them with your primary vocals.
Of course, I'm not entirely sure what the goal was here. Perhaps you met your personal goal. The track beneath the voice is not helping it along or really accentuating in any way. This has the poential to be a short and sweet track. The melancholy is too strong, I feel like I just woke up to find my nose fell off.