Main critique is that the kick is much too sharp. Every time I feel like I'm getting punched. With music, of course, that has the potential to be a good thing. But here it hits my ears all wrong.
Second to that would be that I feel as if the whole entire song is a buildup to something and we never get to hear the main song. It just sounds like it's building through the entire almost six minutes. So when it ends and I don't get to hear what it was building to, it feels a little empty.
Other than those two issues it's a pretty solid and rounded sound. But I feel it should only be used as an intro, maybe the first minute, of another song.
Hey man thanks for commenting again :) the popping kickdrum i have going here is the trademark sound for psy trance, and also the repetitive textures and sounds all through the track with a buildup feel are standard for this style, psy trance never usually has a strong melodic element to it, its all about the textures and atmosphere and in my case i threw in a progressing acid buildup :)