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Hi Pillow,

I'm a fan of the whole spacy like music. I know this is a work in progress so somethings I'm about to say are probably obvious to you.

Mastering issue...no surprise. The kicks have some clipping going on.

I feel like you should make the pad/choir have more presence. This doesn't mean louder, but maybe have less reverb particularly on the lower frequencies of that instrument.

You may want to add in more fx in the first theme before 0:45 just to make it more interesting. The lead instrument should be more powerful. Emphasize those high frequencies and perhaps slight delay to it.

0:45 I like the chordal bass. Perhaps sidechaining could help. If you do have sidechaining already, put some more.

1:15 the song kinda takes a turn down. It doesn't feel catchy and there really isn't much new melodies going on. 1:30 you can't have your lead playing the same 16th notes as the bass. It doesn't feel like your building up to anything if you do that.

Change up the drums a bit. Just a kick and clap is somewhat generic especially for the climax of your demo. Hi hats perhaps add?

You need more fx like that sound at 1:26 (guitarish fade out sound)

Overall, the song needs more melodies and harmonies. By that I also mean a different set of melodies and harmonies...not layering. I'm sure you will fix up the mastering concerns but I'm more concerned about the mixing All your instruments can't have high cuts to them....or at least it sounds like all your instruments are subby except that new instrument at 1:30. Good luck on the finishing product.
5/5 review and vote

bye for now

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pillow responds:

Oh my. I love reviews like this. Constructive criticism helps so much. I will work on....basically all of this haha. Thanks for the help!

PS: I know this is a STUPID question....but how can I remove clipping from the kicks.

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4.72 / 5.00

Aug 2, 2013
11:46 PM EDT
File Info
4.6 MB
2 min 1 sec

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