could i get your permission to use this in a video or youtube channel intro music?

Awesome keep it going!!!

Personally I like it the way it is...
But hey, if you want to add some bass, you could always do the signature Blackmill bass. That would probably fit nicely.
I love the sound, progression, and beat to this though.
Pretty epic

I could see this song being amazing once it's finished, if you do all the right steps of course. You have the melody my friend, I can tell that comes natural. Sitting here listening to it on loop, I can hear a perfect wobble for this song, and if I could explain it to you I would lol. But then again, this is your music, not mine. Though I will lend a hand in saying that, atleast for me, this makes a perfect intro segment bring the wubwubs in at 1:30, or bring in a soft wobble at 1:00 and the drop the break at 1:30 and keep the flow you seem to have within yourself my friend, you wont go wrong with this piece. =]
Kudos for your first try, this is definitely chill and I look forwards to seeing this completed, I give you a 4 rating simply because this is a work in progress. I will gladly give you the 5th as soon as you show us what we already know you're capable of from this short teaser here. =] ~In Dub We Step My Friend, Until We Meet Again~

Sincerely,
-Riggz Rukus

Pretty nice for a first try