I get the impression you wanted something off-tempo? The song, as an idea has some good stuff to go on, I just think that a metronome would have helped you. Desperately needs a bassline, though. It will help take away the focus on the vocals a bit too, where you sort of delve off-key.
In no means a bad song, I think you should come back and pro this one up in the future! It's pretty nice.
thank you so much for constructive comment !