Alright you wanted critique and I'm giving it to you. I'm gonna be completely honest...the fact that your my friend means nothing right now. Okay, so first off this isn't trance. Secondly you really need more instruments and what not going at the same time. Definitely alot more percussion. Generally you need some sort of kick through most of the song...not just bits and pieces. Your melodies need alot of work. I understand you haven't done this much but still. Also, you don't really see "guitar" sounds much in trance. Also your main melody at the beginning that sounds like a cheap horror film needs to go. There are better ways of putting a dark feel on your music without ripping off "dracula" or some black and white cheesy horror movie. Sorry dude for all the criticism but you needed it. Just go and listen to like a butload of trance songs, split each piece of the song up in your head...for ex. most songs have a kick, percussions of some sort, a "lead" which is the main melody...they have builds that lead up to the "leads" or main melodies...they have sound fx that occur at different times...they have bass lines...which is like a deep bass of some sort...they have many variations of the same melody so that it get's diverse. Use snare for builds...crashes as well...use hits and stuff. Just check out some Paul Van Dyk or ATB. Listen to that and break it down...try to recreate it but with different melodies.