i agree with that other dude, need to stick it into a sampler, glitch it up a bit more, get a grimy beat going and it'll sound like aphex twin, bad, check out my track gooon for the kind of production
i'm tinking of.
love and kisses, ;ped
love and kisses? please dont tell me your gay.
I see what you're trying to do, and I can't help but admire it. I think you need an actual beat going though (with the words), and a repeating chorus, verse type of familiarity. It sounds too much like random stuff going on and no rhyme or reason.
This really needs a lot of work, but if done right this could be a great innovative piece.
well then, ill get on that!