Ha! I recognized the FL plucked instantly. Makes me nostalgic for FL... good times.
Here come a lot of suggestions. Before that though I should say that overall this is a pretty good piece, and I think you definitely achieved your goal of capturing loss from a storm. I especially like how the strings come in at :58.
Alright here we go!
My first suggestion is that the plucked melody feels very mechanical. I don't hear much in the way of varied velocities. It's pretty simple to do and will make your pluck sound a lot better instantly. Honestly I'm not the hugest fan of plucked - it might be better to find some other VST - but that could be just because I've heard it so many times.
The kick is a bit of a shock with the pluck, I'm not sure if they traditionally go together. Suggestion is to put some reverb on a snare or something and see how that fits in. Unlike the last guy I don't think it's off beat. However you are probably confusing your listeners because there's not much in way of other percussion to guide you through the song. Some subtle hi hats could do wonders to keep your listeners grounded.
I hear the strings pushing on the limiter at 1:29. A really important tip is that you should just throw out the limiter entirely, and ensure by hand that your song never goes into the red. This single tip has done more for my mixing than anything else.
Melodies need some work. At first I thought they were totally random. But when I focused really hard, i realized I was wrong. This is good! But if I'm zoning out then I can't follow them at all, which is bad. Try to simplify your melodies and cut them down. This will make them easier to understand.
Alright, that's all I've got! Good luck! And don't be too down by all my criticism. It's not as bad as the review makes it sound xD