You have a nice voice but i think you need to work on your recording.
You're doing weird breath pauses, i'm not a singer myself but i know there is some breathing techniques, i don't know if you use it but you seem out of breath sometimes. (the part at 1.20).
Also you do pauses because you're trying to find the right chord on your guitar sometimes (or at least it sounds like it because it's out of time a bit). At 0:15 for example.
And obviously, i think you know that, you need to cut the beginning and the end when you prepare yourself and stuff. It's pretty easy to do even with free stuff.
But you have the cool voice so i think you just need to perfect your recording skills so you'll have a perfectly good song.