Awkward chordal progressions going on after 0:40. They don't lead anywhere satisfying. It sounds like you played different chords separately and botched them together in the piano roll of your DAW. I think you may have also over EQ'ed them because my headphones are picking up some slight bright clipping/distortion. Overall it sounds well empty. At around 1:36 you have a disjointed piano melody, a drum loop and a sub bass part going on. Needs more.
Someone below said your snare is too loud in the mix. It sounds fine to me, might be the headphones. However what i can say is that they need tightening up a bit. Stick an 18KhZ cut on it.
Bit of exploration with effects with sounds would have been great. Bit of convolution reverb on your piano. Some bitcrusher on your drums, make them sound dirty and gritty - juice up the bass - a BIT of reverb to let it flow with the mix. Too much and it will all distort badly and you'll muddy it up.
This is just my feedback. I'm no professional. In fact, my mixes tend to be shockingly bad as i have no speakers but use headphones. But i'm currently doing a Music Technology course at school - so I pretty much know what needs to go into a mix. I just need reliable speakers!
Cheers mate! Looking forward to your next project!
The drums don't seem to blend well with the feeling you are going for. We recommend experimenting with higher register snares to get the more liquid-esque feel you are going for. Try to add some synths in there as well, maybe a distant pad or drone that sets the tone and mood. You have got a great idea, it just needs more work. Expand it, and try to change the beginning disjointed beat to something a little more exciting. Maybe layer a chopped up break over it, add some hi hat loops. Something.
I tried doing what I could with the score, I mean it's not really 0.84 stars quality :P
So here's some of that feedback. Hm...what I think you need is some more variation. Not in melodies...no. I'm thinking in instrument use. You've actually got some pretty good ideas here, but there is an overall feeling of disjointedness throughout the whole song. Kind of empty, too.
Try to work on your transitions! I do see that this is WIP, so there's still plenty of room for improvement.
As for your drums, they sound too loud, too, specifically the snare. Or just the snare, actually. I'm terrible with sound design and similar things, but I can recognize that there could be more tone to them, too.
Your bass gets really weak after 1:25, and I think it really adds to the emptiness of the song, considering you have just 3 sounds going on- drums, bass, piano. If you want to stick with the drum n bass category, put that bass back in there!
Based on what you named this .. "piano thingy", I think you are well aware that this is nothing close to what you think you are actually capable of doing, or at least you know that there is much more to be done to this piece. Right now it sounds like a dump of good ideas hopelessly glued together by laziness and/or lack of inspiration.
Make those good ideas stand out! Try adding something in for harmony, bringing back that bass, and just making everything *flow*. Also, effects! (I am very bad with this) Effects can really make simple stuff sound even more amazing if done right. So fool around with those!
Ah, I will definitely add in more instruments...probably some strings...and something else I suppose.
More layering of the snares, then. (Or more EQing)
The bass being really weak after 1:25 is intentional.
>Right now it sounds like a dump of good ideas hopelessly glued together by laziness and/or lack of inspiration.
Ouch, right in the truther.
I'll try to add in harmony...and I'm scared of effects...besides distortion.